Finally the clock struck five in the afternoon and the doors flung open to reveal the blushing bride. The groom waited for her as she took the long walk down the isle. He waited at the bottom of the stairs to help escort her up to the alter. They both stared at each other as they vows began, soaking in this moment neither of them ever wanted to forget. The groom was told to cherish her all the days they lived and he said I do. The bride was asked similar vows and she promised to keep those as well. Then the whole church bowed their head and prayed and the holiest priest in the land blessed them and their marriage. The Princess was then honored for grace right before the priest declared them man and wife.
It did not take long for the music to fill the air and for the party to start. After music started to be blasted and the celebration had just begun the Prince took his princess away for the evening so they could celebrate their night on an intimate level. Even though the bride and groom had left, the town kept the part going for long after, celebrating the new couple that would rule over them. The whole town partied for a long time because they knew this was going to be the start of something great for the country.
Authors Notes:
I tried to make it a modern day wedding day where the groom and bride are both a prince and a princess. I tried to describe the presents in detailed newer items and then go into the normal ceremony and talk about the guests and them celebrating together and wandering off to their honeymoon. I think this will hopefully make a interesting and relatable piece where it is easier to understand the story.
Bibliography: Ramayana (Public Domain Edition), Romesh Dutt, 1899
Hi Asaleigh! I really liked your story! I think you did a great job in depicting the wedding that every man and woman always dream about! I love your descriptions of the anticipation before the wedding. I could imagine all of the butterflies and the excitement being felt by the bride and groom. I think you picked the perfect picture for your story, too. You described a very modern wedding, but also traditional and I think that is what the pictures capturing. I liked how you made it so modern, but then added the prince and princess part. Whenever I go to a wedding I always feel like the bride and groom are prince and a princess for the day anyway! I really love romantic stories, so I really loved getting to read your story! Thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteI actually read this same story for week 2! I enjoyed this story. In my recount of the story I also focused on the love between Rama and Siti. I liked how you turned the story around and added a wedding scenario. It would be cool to see where else this story went especially if you add the demons and characters against Rama.
ReplyDeleteHi Ace,
ReplyDeleteI loved your story! It reminded me of my own wedding day. Obviously I wasn't married in a castle or anything, but it was a great day. Anyway.. it was great to read a classic love story coming to life and having all parties involved celebrating and enjoying themselves. One possible thing that you could add is to maybe explain what they had to overcome or get through to get to this point. Adding the challenges that they had to overcome, would give make the fairy tale ending be even sweeter. Also, I found a couple of typos while I was reading, so make sure you read through it carefully before posting. This will ensure that the reader can read through without any issues trying to figure out what was meant to be said. The error were very small but any bit helps right? :)
Hi Ace,
ReplyDeleteWow! I loved your story, and more specifically I really loved the picture that you included portraying a Royal wedding, it really helped me to imagine the wedding in my head! Can you imagine being married in a castle?! That would be insane.
I really love how you brought this love story to life and even put a few twists of your own on it. I think that a way that you could improve your story would be to talk about their lives leading up to the wedding and how they had come to be engaged, I think it would make the story have a bit more of a climax when the wedding finally came! Overall I thought you did a fab job!
Abi
Ace,
ReplyDeleteYour story is filled in with a lot of details in it. The use of directions in the story magnifies the imagination and your vision about the story is to be presented accurately. The exact times that you included in the story just makes it more realistic. I really liked the details of modern day wedding that you have in the story. I do think you could have used some more pictures to make it more interesting.
Ace,
ReplyDeleteI really love that you did Rama and Sita's wedding. You did a great job describing the event and the excitement of the whole country. It kind of made me think of the Prince William and Kate's wedding. That was definitely a national not to mention worldwide event and I think Sita and Rama's wedding would be just as grand. I like that you made it a modern wedding as well. I wonder where Rama and Sita would have gone on their honeymoon. I did notice some spelling errors in your story. I think you just didn't press some of the buttons as you were typing. I also really love your blog. It is really easy to navigate through which I really appreciate as a reader. I was having a hard time finding the link to your story source. Since it was the public domain edition I was looking for a link to the story that inspired your own story. Overall, you did a great job! I am excited to read your future stories Ace!
Hey there Asaleigh!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your modern twist on the story, and going more in depth into the actual wedding. What I liked the most was how you expressed their love for each other – like how they were ticking down the time until their wedding started! I wonder if the bride or groom had any pre-wedding jitters. Did the bride wear any of the old/new/borrowed/blue things? As far as formatting, I think putting the image in a more central position of the text might offer a nice break from just pure text, especially since it is such a beautiful church! I like how simple your font size/colors are, it is very easy to read. Also, the first paragraph was a bit on the heavy side, so you might just break that up a bit. Overall, this was such a wonderful story – I look forward to reading more of your stories!
Hey! Your post looks really great. First of all, the title gives me a good indication of what the story I am about to read will be about. Also, I really enjoyed the picture it perfectly tied back to the story and helped me to picture the whole thing better in my head. The spacing of your story is good because it breaks it up and shows different parts and more depth to the story. I wonder in what country is this royal wedding taking place? It was a really beautiful story and I especially enjoyed it because I love weddings. They are extremely magical and you did a great job of giving a lot of detail about the day of. I wish I knew more background story on the couple getting married. Maybe you could have told us how they met? Or even just something meaningful about their relationship?
ReplyDeleteHey Ace!
ReplyDeleteLook at that, we have the same blog style. So obviously it looks awesome. I would suggest either making the font bigger or breaking up your paragraphs so it is easier to read. I also suggest maybe putting the picture somewhere in the middle of the story, to help break it up.
I appreciate the difference in characters. I see the similarities in the Ramayana but I love how you made it your own.
Hi Ace. I love that you did a “Royal Wedding” theme for your storytelling post. Rama and Sita finding love was one of my favorite parts in the epic Ramayana so I find it really cool that you did an homage to that. I felt like the first sentence really started off strong and pulled my attention into the story. The build up to the wedding was written really well also. Even though there were presents to be had, I love that Price Raymond and Princess Sandy could only focus on and be in the moment for their wedding. I thought it was a nice touch that you added that they were at opposite ends of the huge castle. Great detail! I also really liked that the town folk partied for a while for this was a joyous event for the kingdom. The only thing I would change is maybe some more spacing (indent?) at the start of every paragraph to make for an easier read. Other than that, I think you did a great job!
ReplyDeleteAce, You made quite a few grammar mistakes, but that’s okay because it’s nothing hard to fix and your story ideas and plot were solid. I have italicized some grammar errors that I would correct. For example, the sentence “They both could not focus on the presents all they could focus on was that happy moment when they will be names man and wife.” is a run-on and should be revised to read “They both could not focus on the present. All they could focus on was that happy moment when they will be named man an wife.” In the following sentence, I think that the should have been them. Next, “this event had been in the works…” Finally, the word isle is actually spelled aisle. I think your story could really benefit if you change it up the formatting a little. My advice would be to just have a little fun with the bold and italics and maybe add in some spacing so it’s not written in “boring” block paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteI love that "A Royal Wedding" is your title. It drew me in to reading this story. I have two older sisters that are married and I loved going to their wedding so I hoped I would love reading your story too. Turns out I did love the story and I like that you tried to make the story of the Ramayana more relatable!
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to reading more from you!
-Sara
I really liked this story Ace! Every part of it was so cheerful as it seemed to happen in a perfect world. You can tell the bride and groom are good people because all of the kingdom liked them and they weren’t nearly as excited for all the gifts they were receiving as they were to marry the love of their life.
ReplyDeleteIsn't a royal wedding just every girl's dream?! I love that you did a story twist on this! Sita was probably a beautiful bride. I have a few close Indian friends and from what I've heard their weddings are a multi-day event that are over the top! So a royal Indian wedding is probably bigger than I could even imagine!
ReplyDeleteHi Asaleigh,
ReplyDeleteI love stories about love so when I read the title, I was super excited! I love the idea of a royal wedding for a story and you did a great job of including details to set up the story like the many presents, huge castle, and diamonds. It really helped the readers understand the characters. I love how you said the whole town kept partying even after the couple left haha! Great story!
Hi again Asaleigh,
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job on the royal wedding story. You made for a creative version from the original story. You introduced characters and explained each role they had in the wedding, which made the story concise. I thought the story was exciting to read all the way up to the end, which I thought was the best part.